POF profile needs critique

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heres my pof. [url]http://www.plentyoffish.com/viewprofile.aspx?profile_id=21080313[/url]

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That's not a profile. It's just some sentences and a few pics. It's the kind of profile that a really hot girl puts up on a lark just to get validation.

There's plenty of material on the boards to understand how to construct a good profile. Look through the Best Of forum, General Discussion, FR Forum, and Tactics Forum and you'll find plenty of material to help you create a good profile.

Head's up. Don't steal another guy's profile!!! You can borrow aspects and dynamics but don't outright steal someone else's thoughts/words.

PS: Lose the pic of you when you were 17. That's 3-4 years old now.

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ive read your post online game where you talk about hanging from a tree. the only thing I'm not sure about is the body of the profile. Are you supposed to qualify then disqualify to look mysterious. Or should you thread it with dhv spikes? like I used to train for MMA and I broke my nose fighting. I was gonna say that i broke it protecting an ex (didn't really happen but i broke it in a fist fight with another dude but it looks good to women).

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I like what UH put up and his understand of women. I'm thinking of putting some cold reading material in, but im not so sure that would help.

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no offense, but thats a really bad profile. it doesnt have much substance that would make a girl want to respond to it. your "about me" and "first date" section is boring; it's basically what every guy puts on their profile.

remember, the attractive girls get hundreds of messages every week from a wide variety of guys with different types of profiles. so your job is to make yours unique, interesting and different--something that stands out and captures a girls attention.

there are some pretty good threads on here with some excellent profiles that would give you an idea of what i'm talking about. also, another good tip is to browse guys profiles and analyze them. then do something thats a little different. you can also create a fake female profile and see what type of messages guys send you. then you can make sure that you dont send something similar (which is usually boring)

note: i dont do online dating, but the advice above is what i think would work, and has worked for the other guys that do online dating

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I run online Game like crazy. When I'm mining my websites properly, I will have dates set up for pretty much every night of the week. Generally, I fuck every girl on the first or second date. The ones that hold out till the third or fourth (never had them hold out any longer) get a little extra respect from me. I'll actually take those girls to NICE places instead of cooking for them at home and and taking them to cheap, shitty hole-in-the-wall bars.

The key to online success is pretty much what Prodigy said:

-Be unique
-Be funny
-Be aloof
-Use strong language (i.e. don't say I'm not sure what to say OR I'm not sure why I'm on here. Say, I'm awesome and I thought I'd share myself with you fine folks to spread some cheer in your life. Etc.)

Maenad, you're too by the book. I don't disqualify any one unless it's in a way that can be interpretated as me qualifying them. The fact is that you can't disqualify someone unless you know them personally, and any disqualifiers would be preceived as you being an asshole (i.e. no fat chicks, no single moms, etc. ALL women would disqualify you over saying shit like that). Online Game is about damage control while going on the offensive. You have to be aggressive, but you have to be smart about your aggressiveness.

It sounds like you read my post in the Best Of forum. Good. And UH's, in the General Discussion Forum. Awesome. There are other threads in the FR and Tactics Forums. The one in the Tactics Forum is especially helpful because it has profile examples from a bunch of different guys.

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[QUOTE=Prodigy;40701]no offense, but thats a really bad profile. it doesnt have much substance that would make a girl want to respond to it. your "about me" and "first date" section is boring; it's basically what every guy puts on their profile.

remember, the attractive girls get hundreds of messages every week from a wide variety of guys with different types of profiles. so your job is to make yours unique, interesting and different--something that stands out and captures a girls attention.

there are some pretty good threads on here with some excellent profiles that would give you an idea of what i'm talking about. also, another good tip is to browse guys profiles and analyze them. then do something thats a little different. you can also create a fake female profile and see what type of messages guys send you. then you can make sure that you dont send something similar (which is usually boring)

note: i dont do online dating, but the advice above is what i think would work, and has worked for the other guys that do online dating[/QUOTE]

I actually get opened sometimes because of my date section. Ill think I will change my body section to be more interesting.

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[QUOTE=Bull Run;40702]I run online Game like crazy. When I'm mining my websites properly, I will have dates set up for pretty much every night of the week. Generally, I fuck every girl on the first or second date. The ones that hold out till the third or fourth (never had them hold out any longer) get a little extra respect from me. I'll actually take those girls to NICE places instead of cooking for them at home and and taking them to cheap, shitty hole-in-the-wall bars.

The key to online success is pretty much what Prodigy said:

-Be unique
-Be funny
-Be aloof
-Use strong language (i.e. don't say I'm not sure what to say OR I'm not sure why I'm on here. Say, I'm awesome and I thought I'd share myself with you fine folks to spread some cheer in your life. Etc.)

Maenad, you're too by the book. I don't disqualify any one unless it's in a way that can be interpretated as me qualifying them. The fact is that you can't disqualify someone unless you know them personally, and any disqualifiers would be preceived as you being an asshole (i.e. no fat chicks, no single moms, etc. ALL women would disqualify you over saying shit like that). Online Game is about damage control while going on the offensive. You have to be aggressive, but you have to be smart about your aggressiveness.

It sounds like you read my post in the Best Of forum. Good. And UH's, in the General Discussion Forum. Awesome. There are other threads in the FR and Tactics Forums. The one in the Tactics Forum is especially helpful because it has profile examples from a bunch of different guys.[/QUOTE]

I was talking about disqualifying myself,not negging which is a different form of disqualification. I was gonna put something like "at times im boisterous and loud and at others i'm quite and reserved". It would kind of be like me cold reading myself through qualification and disqualification of different traits. it would make me mysterious and engage the girls through curiosity.

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[QUOTE=maenad;40705]I was talking about disqualifying myself,not negging which is a different form of disqualification. I was gonna put something like "at times im boisterous and loud and at others i'm quite and reserved". It would kind of be like me cold reading myself through qualification and disqualification of different traits. it would make me mysterious and engage the girls through curiosity.[/QUOTE]


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Hey
I travel a ton, so I supplement going out with online game. When you are only home 2 days a week you have to be creative... often the first time I meet with a girl will be a weekend. Not ideal...

Anyway...
Bull Run and Prodigy are right on. You have to seperate yourself from the pack. Display the same confidence you would have if you were opening a set in a bar. Tell a brief story... about how fun you are. "Last minute I decided to go to St Patricks day in New Orleans... things got crazy and I was dragged up on stage with the DJ" . ANYTHING

-Be creative
-be funny or sarcastic (if sarcastic make sure it is over the top so she doesnt misinterpert it)
-Be memorable
-have interesting activities
-Be vague...


Here is another thing that has worked over and over. Once you make contact with the girls dont rush to meet them in person. Be busy... you are not online out of desperation, so don't come off that way. Start with flirty texts, talk to her for a little bit once or twice. Run game as if you were with the girl... set time constraints, play games, ect. This is simply to build up , repport, their emotional attachment and also get her excited to see you. If you do it right she will be kissing you as soon as you see her.

PEACE